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Comrade's Scribblings


Lyrics: All Of You

Posted by Comrade , in Lyrics 06 September 2014 · 121 views

All Of You

In life there is no soundtrack
But when I kiss you I hear music 
You cut me deep, but I don't bleed
Because you're the medicine I need
Every word you say becomes my favourite love song
Every story told the next to win awards
I'm suspicious that you don't plan to let go
A thousand years couldn't be enough to figure and to know



Senses Prevail - Chapter 6

Posted by Comrade , in Senses Prevail 10 August 2014 · 251 views

Cracking on with the redrafting, I've finished Chapter 6. I've added a lot more depth - more odd little things that just happen on nights out, and in the first couple of paragraphs I've fleshed out some of Williams's thoughts to give more of an insight and more depth to his mental state. There's more fun in the chapter now, I made a conscious effort to re...


'She's got a Baby Now' and 'Good Reputation'

Posted by Comrade , in Poetry 22 July 2014 · 351 views

She’s got a Baby Now
Five years since I last saw her
And I've thought of her every day
Until I saw her on the street
And she looked the other way
No she didn't try to be mean
I just don't think she's been seen
The way I saw her way back then
She was the first, so it hurt the most
She'll be the worst but you won't care about...


Senses Prevail - Chapter 5

Posted by Comrade , in Senses Prevail 15 July 2014 · 386 views

My second draft of this chapter, as with chapter 4, resulted in little structural change. There has been a re-jig of some of the middle section where Williams is going through the girls, in order to set one or two of them up as more important later in the story, and some dialogue has been added. Aside from that, changes have mostly been sorting out senten...


Senses Prevail - Chapter 4

Posted by Comrade , in Senses Prevail 15 July 2014 · 297 views

Herein lies the re-draft of Chapter 4. I was pleased with this the first time around, so the revisions are relatively small. Some bits have been added and some previously difficult syntax has been corrected. I wanted to maintain a sense of innocence which is soon to be knowingly lost as Williams discovers his pleasures.... 
For those who are f...


Senses Prevail - Chapter 3

Posted by Comrade , in Senses Prevail 30 June 2014 · 440 views

I've redrafted chapter 3 - not extensively like one and two, but I feel it's stronger. I've kept the dialogue short and snappy, and really just sorted out some sentence structure stuff, added in some more musings and background to Williams' character, and opened him up a little more to the reader. The chapter still stands as the first real chance to explo...


Senses Prevail - Chapter 2

Posted by Comrade , in Senses Prevail 23 June 2014 · 371 views

This is the re-worked Chapter 2; it isn't as heavily restructured as Chapter 1, but it too has incorporated some of the prologue - less directly, in that little text has been transferred here, but more in a suggestive sense; some interests and traits, instead of being described in detail as in the prologue, are suggested through examples and ideas here, a...


Senses Prevail - Chapter 1

Posted by Comrade , in Senses Prevail 23 June 2014 · 449 views

I've reworked the story to not need the prologue, in doing so absorbing some of it straight into this and the next chapter, but also taking what the prologue said and writing that freshly into the rest of the book. I decided I wanted people to get to know Jack Williams through things occurring and as the story unfolds, rather than having all the backgroun...


My Queen

Posted by Comrade , in Poetry 26 May 2014 · 139 views

Ah! A return to my blithering attempts at some faux neo-Baudelairean linguistically decadent Romantic poetry for the first time in a while. Feels good to be back in 'brooding romantic hero' mode. If my writing, be it poetry or prose, has any given theme then that theme is honesty, and honestly, this style feels the most honest to the vulnerable corners in...



Posted by Comrade , in Poetry 19 May 2014 · 257 views

Time makes changes
Everybody starts strangers
The strangest times are with you
Time moves over
Even we get older
We live our lives in the nude
Time is changing
Rushing through faces
The last thing I want to rush is you
The crime is aging
People scared of their changes
Just as long as I live my life with you
That's all I want to d...

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