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Comrade's Scribblings


Senses Prevail - Chapter 10 (part 2)

Posted by Comrade , in Senses Prevail 26 April 2015 · 151 views

Hello. I've finished the second part of Chapter 10 . It is a bit of a climax for Williams. I've tried to capture the sense of being carried away; a lack of control and being caught in a blur with moments of lucidity. It's based heavily on something that happened. Really the theme of this chapter is that you can't escape: just going somewhere else - the sa...



Posted by Comrade , in Poetry 03 April 2015 · 151 views

These chains that are crawling through my veins 
Are tightening the rasping in my throat
Under the guise that they are pleasing me 
If I take all of the things that I've learned 
Stripped, edited down to a single word
Lit up by the light of the loves I burned 
What, I wonder, would there be written down?
What, I wonder, wo...


Senses Prevail - Chapter 10 (part 1)

Posted by Comrade , in Senses Prevail 15 March 2015 · 197 views

Going has been slow but ever is it heading forwards. I don't have too much time or energy to devote to writing at the moment, but every couple of days I chip away a few more words. Mostly disjointed quotes, phrases and ideas for descriptions, or revisions to that which already exists. I've made a lot of revisions, actually. I've managed to get a bit of th...


A Student's Room At 3AM

Posted by Comrade , in Poetry 11 March 2015 · 202 views

A Student's Room At 3AM
A girl knocked on my door almost every night
And in they'd come, cool and sad;
And we'd chat and fuck and smoke weed 
Breathing in the same air 
In a low lit lip sync affair...
We'd think that it was normal 
If we ever thought at all
That it'd be forever, that it'd never end;
Not even aware of youth, l...



Posted by Comrade , in Poetry 07 January 2015 · 204 views

When I've sat down to write recently, there has been a lot of reflection. It has taken a long time for a lot of old dust to settle, and now it has, I feel emotionally free to explore it, as if watching someone else.  There is a little whimsy in it, a sense of nostalgia - but no regret. There are a lot of very sexually charged, anxious, excitable...



Posted by Comrade , in Poetry 29 November 2014 · 263 views

"I was thinking about going to bed," she said
Then she started pulling my hair and we were doing it again
"I didn't even like you when I saw you first
But I was riding on an all-time low,"
When we went to bed she started crying again
“You only ever talk about sex and going out with our friends,”
She put a kiss on my cheek,...


Nature's Law

Posted by Comrade , in Poetry 10 November 2014 · 220 views

Nature's Law
In grief it is tempting to claim
The world is ugly; limp and lame - 
But temptation, that charming bride 
Is the very human beauty 
Man's morality seeks to hide 
Beauty is not in what we hold;
Happiness too fleeting t'grow old
Ugliness is bleak verity;
So man must become a monster
In passion - tr...


Senses Prevail - Chapter 9

Posted by Comrade , in Senses Prevail 29 October 2014 · 240 views

So I have finally finished another chapter. Hopefully someone out there is reading along in some way. It's taken a long time, this has been chipped away at for a while, but never forced. So what's going on? From here the consequences of Williams' actions begin to make themselves known. It's a sexy chapter, dirty. It's the continuation of the turning p...


Senses Prevail - Chapter 8

Posted by Comrade , in Senses Prevail 29 September 2014 · 456 views

The redraft of Chapter 8 adds a bit of exposition to proceedings. It still explores Williams' power over people - his manipulation of friends; his manipulation of conversation; his charm and flirtaciousness, but it does so far more in the context of Jamie not being there. Williams finds himself a little alone and a little isolated, and very much surrounde...


Senses Prevail - Chapter 7

Posted by Comrade , in Senses Prevail 29 September 2014 · 474 views

There's been a long time since I updated Senses Prevail, but hey ho. The Chapter 7 redraft is quite extensive, it's over half as long again as the original text, still all in that one night, but with far more dialogue and a much deeper look at Williams and Jamie's relationship through their interaction with each other and their friends. A lot of that is d...

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