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Comrade's Scribblings


Senses Prevail - Chapter 10 (part 1)

Posted by Comrade , in Senses Prevail 15 March 2015 · 151 views

Going has been slow but ever is it heading forwards. I don't have too much time or energy to devote to writing at the moment, but every couple of days I chip away a few more words. Mostly disjointed quotes, phrases and ideas for descriptions, or revisions to that which already exists. I've made a lot of revisions, actually. I've managed to get a bit of th...


A Student's Room At 3AM

Posted by Comrade , in Poetry 11 March 2015 · 158 views

A Student's Room At 3AM
A girl knocked on my door almost every night
And in they'd come, cool and sad;
And we'd chat and fuck and smoke weed 
Breathing in the same air 
In a low lit lip sync affair...
We'd think that it was normal 
If we ever thought at all
That it'd be forever, that it'd never end;
Not even aware of youth, l...



Posted by Comrade , in Poetry 07 January 2015 · 181 views

When I've sat down to write recently, there has been a lot of reflection. It has taken a long time for a lot of old dust to settle, and now it has, I feel emotionally free to explore it, as if watching someone else.  There is a little whimsy in it, a sense of nostalgia - but no regret. There are a lot of very sexually charged, anxious, excitable...



Posted by Comrade , in Poetry 29 November 2014 · 238 views

"I was thinking about going to bed," she said
Then she started pulling my hair and we were doing it again
"I didn't even like you when I saw you first
But I was riding on an all-time low,"
When we went to bed she started crying again
“You only ever talk about sex and going out with our friends,”
She put a kiss on my cheek,...


Nature's Law

Posted by Comrade , in Poetry 10 November 2014 · 204 views

Nature's Law
In grief it is tempting to claim
The world is ugly; limp and lame - 
But temptation, that charming bride 
Is the very human beauty 
Man's morality seeks to hide 
Beauty is not in what we hold;
Happiness too fleeting t'grow old
Ugliness is bleak verity;
So man must become a monster
In passion - tr...


Senses Prevail - Chapter 9

Posted by Comrade , in Senses Prevail 29 October 2014 · 215 views

So I have finally finished another chapter. Hopefully someone out there is reading along in some way. It's taken a long time, this has been chipped away at for a while, but never forced. So what's going on? From here the consequences of Williams' actions begin to make themselves known. It's a sexy chapter, dirty. It's the continuation of the turning p...


Senses Prevail - Chapter 8

Posted by Comrade , in Senses Prevail 29 September 2014 · 437 views

The redraft of Chapter 8 adds a bit of exposition to proceedings. It still explores Williams' power over people - his manipulation of friends; his manipulation of conversation; his charm and flirtaciousness, but it does so far more in the context of Jamie not being there. Williams finds himself a little alone and a little isolated, and very much surrounde...


Senses Prevail - Chapter 7

Posted by Comrade , in Senses Prevail 29 September 2014 · 448 views

There's been a long time since I updated Senses Prevail, but hey ho. The Chapter 7 redraft is quite extensive, it's over half as long again as the original text, still all in that one night, but with far more dialogue and a much deeper look at Williams and Jamie's relationship through their interaction with each other and their friends. A lot of that is d...


Lyrics: All Of You

Posted by Comrade , in Lyrics 06 September 2014 · 188 views

All Of You

In life there is no soundtrack
But when I kiss you I hear music 
You cut me deep, but I don't bleed
Because you're the medicine I need
Every word you say becomes my favourite love song
Every story told the next to win awards
I'm suspicious that you don't plan to let go
A thousand years couldn't be enough to figure and to know



Senses Prevail - Chapter 6

Posted by Comrade , in Senses Prevail 10 August 2014 · 358 views

Cracking on with the redrafting, I've finished Chapter 6. I've added a lot more depth - more odd little things that just happen on nights out, and in the first couple of paragraphs I've fleshed out some of Williams's thoughts to give more of an insight and more depth to his mental state. There's more fun in the chapter now, I made a conscious effort to re...

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